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you hugged me.
you can deny it now, of course. but i'll remember.
try as i might to forget, i'll remember.

week two of the summer abroad and you?
you made the first move.
you broke the rules.
you extended your arms and pressed chest to chest and folded me in your embrace.
a scant second and i knew that you and me? we.
joined heart to heart in an instant.

next to you i felt dirty and unkempt
like my high school uniform
untidy wrinkled and careworn.

so sue me if i fell that hard for you.
you, with your dorky glasses.
you, with your legs like water reeds.
you and your chivalry and outdated sense of noblesse oblige to the american.
two weeks and you enveloped me.
the antidote to a stiff upper lip.

it's nearly four years since i met you.
you wrote me letters every month.
you paid for my cell phone service so that you and me. we.
talking and texting about my trip.
you spent the bitter weekend where she got married having fun with me.
all because you reached out to me.
melded limb to limb one second.

and when i say we loved each other biblically,
i mean to say that i knew you in that way that adam
upon sight of eve
declared her at last bone of my bone and flesh of my flesh

i spent almost four years waiting on you.

and yet
now
i always remember to never mention you
in conversations with friends.
As if the whisper of your name
could conjure your presence.
i try to remember to think of you
only as broken clocks herald time.

i never remember to forget you.
you hugged me.

Date: 2009-10-18 04:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] baxaphobia.livejournal.com
Sad. Very sad.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
it really was. thanks for reading.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
*blush* thanks. i'm glad you think so.

Date: 2009-10-18 05:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stormkitty.livejournal.com
Poignant and heartbreaking at the same time.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thank you. that was the effect i was striving for.

Date: 2009-10-18 07:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] foxdiva9.livejournal.com
Thank you for bearing that

Date: 2009-10-20 03:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thanks for reading. i sometimes wonder if i've beaten the story of my ex into the ground. idol's giving me a fresh audience. :)

Date: 2009-10-18 08:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] impoetry.livejournal.com
Very sad but beautiful.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thank you very much.

Date: 2009-10-18 10:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cacophonesque.livejournal.com
This just makes me feel all sadface.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
oh, i know! i was a wreck when this happened. thank you for reading, though. it heartens me to know i've moved someone, somehow.

Date: 2009-10-19 07:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] meee-tooo.livejournal.com
Very powerful.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
*blush* thank you. no one's ever said that about my writing before.

Date: 2009-10-20 03:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poppetawoppet.livejournal.com
What a unique and lovely entry

Date: 2009-10-20 03:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thank you. i wasn't sure if it was good enough, but it seemed to fit, you know?

Date: 2009-10-20 04:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] teaberryblue.livejournal.com
Wow. I thought this was very evocative. Nice work!

Date: 2009-10-20 04:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thanks so much! it's nice to hear that folks like what i write.

Date: 2009-10-20 07:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elderwoodpixie.livejournal.com
I like your style, very evocative. You have an emotional purity in your voice that touches the heart.

Date: 2009-10-20 02:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
*blush* thank you for saying that. and thank you for reading.

Date: 2009-10-20 08:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] joeymichaels.livejournal.com
What a refreshing entry! Thank you!

Date: 2009-10-20 02:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thanks so much for reading.

Date: 2009-10-20 07:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brand0new0day.livejournal.com
This was so sad and . . . pretty. I'm not usually big on poetry but I loved this.

Date: 2009-10-20 08:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
i'm glad you enjoyed it, despite not usually liking poetry.

Date: 2009-10-20 07:50 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] shadowwolf13
Very bittersweet. Thank you for sharing.

Date: 2009-10-20 08:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thank you for reading. a burden shared, you know?

Date: 2009-10-20 08:59 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] shadowwolf13
Indeed. It's always easier when you have somebody there for you.

Date: 2009-10-20 11:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] oldscratchx.livejournal.com
Nice. First one I've seen in this style. If you're looking to stand out, it does.

Date: 2009-10-21 03:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thanks. if it helps me stand out, i'm glad. but it just seemed to fit the situation.

Date: 2009-10-21 09:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] onda-bianca.livejournal.com
My heart hurts a bit...how sad. :(

Date: 2009-10-21 11:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
it was, indeed, sad. thank you for reading.

Date: 2009-10-22 01:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dreamchaser.livejournal.com
Very sad but beautiful.

Date: 2009-10-22 01:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
i'm glad you liked it. sad situation, but it served its purpose.

Date: 2009-10-22 05:18 pm (UTC)

Date: 2009-10-22 06:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thank you very much!

Date: 2009-10-26 01:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thndrstd.livejournal.com
I really enjoyed this entry. Great job.

Date: 2009-10-26 01:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadows-of.livejournal.com
thank you very much!

Date: 2009-10-26 03:52 am (UTC)

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